J.C. Belding

Thanks for the advice! I'll do what I can without having to rewrite the whole thing. I'm not that good at this type of petry but I'll take out the ...

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There was once a wise old sage who traveled the world, searching for the one foreseen in a dismal trance. He finally discovered this person in an unknown country, upon ...

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You poem starts good but its quality fades away after a while. If you revisit it and make the entire piece sound poetic, you will be able to express your ...

You actually did a great job with sucha long poem. I know it's hard to do but you should adjust the meter a little bit so all of your rymes ...

Darkness The vast cloud of death In the Eye of the Storm In the heart of the madness A spark A shimmer A flame Golden fire Ever-shining Everlasting Mighty fuel ...

Your piece has some good descriptors but they don't come together in the best way. This is why I believe it starts to get boring. Your opening and closing verses ...

The sun will rise Upon the East The time will come To laugh and feast A cloud will pass Bringing rain An introduction To fear and pain The water darkenss ...

Hi. My names Jake and I just wanted to say I relly excited to contribute to the Young Writers Society. My writing usualy has a medieval theme to it because ...

Pretty good. Your Ideas were great. Work a litlle bit on your work choice though. If you keep readig and writing I can invision you being a fabulous poet. Still ...

Wow. I'm really impressed. The only thing I would change is "the messege of the soul" part. Just make some slight adjustments to make it run more smoothly. I believe ...

Your poem certainly has powerful emotion to it but your word choice and overall format really weighed it down. If you make some of these fixes your poem will really ...

Soon so soon shall we come to peace Soon so soon shall we thrive Soon so soon shall we lift the vale Of prejudice and disguise Soon so soon will ...